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 Posted: Fri Dec 02, 2005 12:52 am Post subject: Re: Ms. Hyrule Beauty Gorgeous.....er....Person! |
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*Opens mouth*
Dark Kirby wrote: Read and Compliment !
*closes mouth*
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Posted: Fri Dec 02, 2005 4:21 am Post subject: |
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I will say only one thing.
If you want only compliments on your stories, you have come to the wrong place to get them. We are not mean people, but we constructiely criticize everytihng. the only way to get to be a better writter is to hear critique and act on the suggestions. If all you ever hear was "that was great!", you will never improve because you will not know WHAT to improve. Im not saying you're bad at all, Im just saying, everyone can improve, and its the job of the reader to tell the writier what could be worked on.
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Hunter
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Posted: Fri Dec 02, 2005 11:29 pm Post subject: |
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Is there even a point to this tripe?! Complementing this would be an outright lie.
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Sephy wrote: Jesus Christ, it's like an incarnation of Voltron that bothers people to death instead of saving the universe. Steven wrote: Seriously, the fucking thing was so ghetto they originally designed it to be able to use lipstick containers as bullet casings.
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Dark Kirby
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Posted: Fri Dec 02, 2005 11:55 pm Post subject: |
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Thank you dekudiva, and peoples, I'm just using my imagination! I'm just saying, if you have something hurtful to say, please post it less hurtful!
And some of my stories may suck, but guess what? I DON'T CARE! I'm posting this for my enjoyment and for others enjoyment too. I agree with Rayven, but as long as the critism isn't really rude or mean, go ahead!
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Posted: Fri Dec 02, 2005 11:56 pm Post subject: |
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Hunter there's no reason to be a jackass! If all you can sprout out hateful then why bother posting?? Everyone hase to start somewhere.
As for the story, well, you did a very good job at attaining random and cheesey, I'm sure this will go over well on FFN.
If you wish to improve then I'd suggest vering away from the script format, unless it's your intention to write plays, but I wouldn't sugest it. I know that the diologe is the most fun to write, but we have to take the good with the bad. And instead of just saying something like, 'It suddenly erupted into a fist fight' why don't you try discribing how it happped? Just a couple of thoughts.  _________________ 
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Hunter
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2005 12:00 am Post subject: |
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Hey, I'm just telling the truth. I always tell the truth, even when I review.
_________________ "The problem with people is that they don't look at the big picture. Eventually, we're each going to die, our species will go extinct, the Sun will explode, and the Universe will collapse. Existence isn't only temporary, it's pointless! We're all doomed, and worse, nothing matters!"
Sephy wrote: Jesus Christ, it's like an incarnation of Voltron that bothers people to death instead of saving the universe. Steven wrote: Seriously, the fucking thing was so ghetto they originally designed it to be able to use lipstick containers as bullet casings.
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2005 12:01 am Post subject: |
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There's a diffrence between being truthful and being hateful.
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Hunter
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2005 12:03 am Post subject: |
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Well I'm being truthful. Can anyone who isn't a suckup to this girl read this and enjoy it as it is? I doubt it. I'm just bringing honesty. The only way to get better is to first accept that you need to.
_________________ "The problem with people is that they don't look at the big picture. Eventually, we're each going to die, our species will go extinct, the Sun will explode, and the Universe will collapse. Existence isn't only temporary, it's pointless! We're all doomed, and worse, nothing matters!"
Sephy wrote: Jesus Christ, it's like an incarnation of Voltron that bothers people to death instead of saving the universe. Steven wrote: Seriously, the fucking thing was so ghetto they originally designed it to be able to use lipstick containers as bullet casings.
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Dark Kirby
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2005 9:39 pm Post subject: |
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I am admitting that I need to write better stories. But these are my first few, and you know what? If you hate it don't reveiw! If its 'commci commca', then reveiw if you want. And if you like it, BE MY GUEST!!!!
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Hunter
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2005 9:58 pm Post subject: |
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Here's a hint: don't post crap online if you're going to act like a twelve year old brat as soon as you see non-golden reviews.
_________________ "The problem with people is that they don't look at the big picture. Eventually, we're each going to die, our species will go extinct, the Sun will explode, and the Universe will collapse. Existence isn't only temporary, it's pointless! We're all doomed, and worse, nothing matters!"
Sephy wrote: Jesus Christ, it's like an incarnation of Voltron that bothers people to death instead of saving the universe. Steven wrote: Seriously, the fucking thing was so ghetto they originally designed it to be able to use lipstick containers as bullet casings.
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Lionheart
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2005 11:07 pm Post subject: |
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First off, if you want a golden, "compliment only" review, post a fic that is actually worthy of such a review. I will say that this is funny, but it's still got its faults.
Don't think that I'm saying my work, or anybody else's for that matter, is perfect. That would be an impossible feat.
Now, if you're going to get upset because somebody suggested (Or pushed on you) better ideas, then chill. ConCrit happens. I got it often, when I was posting what I had in my mind. I had people who would say "What were you thinking?". You're not going to avoid it any more than I, or any other author, could. It's something that comes along with writing: There will be people who like it, and people who don't.
Now, my views on the fic:
T'was a short, random bout of hilarity. But only for so long. I chuckled and chortled and laughed, and whatnot. Imaginative. But perfect? Far from it, I must say.
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There are assholes on the internet. Get used to it.
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